What do you think of this snippet (honest feedback)?

I really don't feel inclined to give serious editorial comment to something that was written because you were bored. It says to me that you really don't care much about the piece you are writing. Sorry, but that's the impression I get - and it isn't just you. I'm getting quite tired of people posting stuff that they just wrote five minutes ago, asking for critiques and telling me to ignore the spelling and grammar.