Tuesday, August 2, 2011

Is this a good start to my story? (Copyright)?

"I thought... I thought I was beyond this. But I'm not. I've waited too long, lost too much!" He gripped the IMI Desert Eagle tightly in his hands, so as to steady his aim, for his anger inside of him had consumed his soul. Niko was no longer himself, but a new being devoted only in revenge. The coward who had killed his family, for the small fortune now lay in his hands free, for him to dispose his will upon. He was now the one who dealt the cards, for he had the authority to decide who lives and and who dies, for in this situation he was god. The warm tears flowed from his victims face, and he begged for his life to be sparred. " Did you have mercy on my mother, for my father!" For years he had imagined the moment he would meet his parents killer, and how he would exact his revenge, and finally be able to set there memories in peace.

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